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what do you think of this line? need feedback
Topic Started: Sunday, 7. November 2010, 02:21 (730 Views)
WolfEyes
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themeltingmind
Wednesday, 10. November 2010, 19:43
did i say he couldn't express himself? i was simply stating my opinion, just what the topic requested. if you can't take feedback, why create a topic like this where you'll just put people down for criticizing your stuff? face it, you won't always get positive outcomes. and just because you think it's good, does not mean it is. music is something that is very opinion-based; many entertainers today in the music industry struggle to get a hold of fans simply because it does not appeal to them.

i did conclude, and i found out there was no message. it was just words. the poet is supposed to convey something, make me feel. i feel nothing with this.
He asked for constructive criticism. Your statements were in no way constructive. In fact they were the exact oppsosite. Re-read his original post. He asked specifically for suggestions and constructive criticisim. If you don't understand what constructive criticism is then you should refrain from commenting.

Then again it may be too much to ask of some 16 years olds.... :nope:
I'm out of bed and dressed. What more do you want?

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besides, this isnt the full rap im still adding more
M.o.D's official topic for written raps: http://outlineforum.com/topic/4034275/1/#new
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WolfEyes
Wednesday, 10. November 2010, 20:58
themeltingmind
Wednesday, 10. November 2010, 19:43
did i say he couldn't express himself? i was simply stating my opinion, just what the topic requested. if you can't take feedback, why create a topic like this where you'll just put people down for criticizing your stuff? face it, you won't always get positive outcomes. and just because you think it's good, does not mean it is. music is something that is very opinion-based; many entertainers today in the music industry struggle to get a hold of fans simply because it does not appeal to them.

i did conclude, and i found out there was no message. it was just words. the poet is supposed to convey something, make me feel. i feel nothing with this.
He asked for constructive criticism. Your statements were in no way constructive. In fact they were the exact oppsosite. Re-read his original post. He asked specifically for suggestions and constructive criticisim. If you don't understand what constructive criticism is then you should refrain from commenting.

Then again it may be too much to ask of some 16 years olds.... :nope:
he edited his post, i saw the original. there was no 'constructive' in it. get your facts straight.
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Zema
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Hey, play nice and drop it guys.

I commented on this on F2F. I figured it was about Star Wars. Adding Wolf's parts to it definitely makes it better, and more like a rap.
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WolfEyes
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Thanks Zema... :)

Thought I recognized that avatar and sig on that "other" board. Have to go back tomorrow and wave at ya :#
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It sounds alright. :P Keep it up!
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