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| IllegallySniped | Wednesday, 16. March 2011, 11:39 Post #1 |
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This is a poem I wrote for my brother a while back. He wanted to join the U.S. Army as a marine. Warning! Strong Language!
Edited by IllegallySniped, Thursday, 17. March 2011, 06:59.
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| IllegallySniped | Wednesday, 16. March 2011, 13:38 Post #2 |
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What you all think? Good, bad, horrible? |
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| Tom | Wednesday, 16. March 2011, 14:01 Post #3 |
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Light that never goes out.
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That's actually pretty cool. I like.
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| IllegallySniped | Wednesday, 16. March 2011, 14:05 Post #4 |
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Thank you! I wrote it about 2 years ago. I thought I lost it, but found it in a file I was looking through a couple days ago. |
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| Gabe. | Wednesday, 16. March 2011, 15:03 Post #5 |
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looks nice, a few grammar mistakes but nice |
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| IllegallySniped | Wednesday, 16. March 2011, 15:51 Post #6 |
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Do you mind pointing them out. I want to use this in a contest coming up and I need it to be as Grammar-mistake free.
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| IllegallySniped | Thursday, 17. March 2011, 06:59 Post #7 |
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Well, I changed some minor ones that I managed to spot, but please if anyone notices anymore. Point them out. I am use to criticism.
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| IllegallySniped | Monday, 21. March 2011, 15:53 Post #8 |
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Bump! I was looking for some places where I could enter this poem. Like a poem contest. If anyone knows of anyplace, please do share. |
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